[Chat Log] Nov-Dec 2019

[Tenchi Masaki]

I am so going through that with my story even the title I’m iffy on

 

[Claire Yeon]

In my defense, I'm also the kind of reader where if a story doesn't captivate me from the first page, I stop reading. Therefore, it is essential that the first few paragraphs are nearly flawless))

 

[systemcat]

@Claire Yeon Hmm, not sure what advice to give. Normally the process for writing for me is smooth.? @Tenchi Masaki Be clever, that's what I try to do. Back to @Claire Yeon ,er SP has a slow start, you might not like it.

 

[Claire Yeon]

So far, the only thing I haven't changed about my first chapter is the opening sentence: "Fifty feet from the helicopter, a rush of lightheadedness caused Claire Yeon to sway."))

 

[systemcat]

Smilie went in the wrong place. *face plam*

 

[Claire Yeon]

@systemcat but you also present your work in comic format, which is a different ballgame entirely. A "slow start" is more palatable if there are other appealing aspects to it, and that's often a matter of opinion anyway. Art, period, is subjective.))

 

[systemcat]

... .. The prose story I've been writing.

 

[Tenchi Masaki]

For example I think Comic Art is Art others don’t for some reason.

 

[Claire Yeon]

Forgive me, I was thinking of what you've been posting here which is very enjoyable.))

 

[Tenchi Masaki]

And fortunately I’m not having trouble coming up with stuff but I’m intentionally overthinking the presentation of the beginning paragraphs is all.

 

[Claire Yeon]

@Tenchi Masaki Comic art is absolutely art and anyone who says otherwise can fight me.))

 

[Claire Yeon]

One of my clients is a comic artist and his work is a) beautiful and b) profitable ))